Help from my Writing Buddies (and everyone else)

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I have come up with several story ideas. They are a bit depressing, probably mushy, and will take a lot of research. But I really want some ideas and input. They all have problems.

Here’s the first:

The Main Character is a 23 year old young man wants revenge on his father. Between ages 1-13 his father only showed up randomly when drunk and abused him and his mother. He blames his father for his miserable childhood and all problems since, and for all his mother’s health problems. When he was 13, his father went to prison for 10 years. While in prison his father wrote MC, but MC always burned the letter without opening the envelope. Now his father is being released and he is getting ready to hunt him down and kill him for all he did to him and his mom.

Possible Opposition –
His mother is still alive begging him not to?
His father is fierce and dangerous?
His father is defenseless and harps on MC’s conscience?
His father is now a Christian and begging for forgiveness?
MC becomes a Christian?

Obviously, the problem with this story idea is that I don’t know which way to turn the story. Any help? You can throw out as many ideas as you have. I’d love them.

 

Here’s the second:

Leny is a 14 year old Mexican girl. Her family, which includes grandfather, aunts, uncles, 2 siblings, and 10 half siblings or cousins, live in three small shacks on the edge of the city. Her older brothers have each grown up to work for the cartel. Her brother Carlos who is 15 will be working for them in just a matter of time. They don’t have much of a choice.
She takes care of the small children and goes to school when she has time. But she has only a few changes of clothes, usually not enough food, her grandfather, father, and uncles get drunk regularly.
How does she get out of this situation?

The problem with this story idea is that while the situation is heart wrenching and gripping, I don’t know how to get her out of it. And even more difficult, how does one get the whole family out of such a situation, especially when this has been going on for generations? The most depressing part of this story is that I’ve met Leny personally, she’s a real girl, and her situation is only one of many like it.

 

Here’s the third and longest idea:

This idea is actually many combined. It could even be joined with the second story idea.
The MC is a single Mexican mom near the Texas/Mexican border. Her teenaged son has duo-citizenship. For this reason he feels out of place in both countries. There are several cartels in Mexico, some kill and kidnap, some stick to distributing drugs. The son went to the “good” cartel to work for them and get their protection for him and his mom. His mom is kidnapped one evening by the “bad” cartel and questioned about her son’s activities. She knows nothing so is let go. She fights with her son about it, and they determine to leave suddenly and swim the river.
They do. Right now (believe it or not) if you are caught as an illegal alien, you are given a check up, all your shots, food stamps, maybe more—which is more than you get if you come across legally. Then you are released and told to show up for a court date. No one ever does. The system is wack! Obviously, I’ll need to do more research. But anyway, the mom and her son can also get help from a charity organization to make her legal.

2nd part of story: The mom gets training as a nurse and gets a job at a Planned Parenthood clinic. She loves her job and is finally providing for her family.
But her son struggles hard with depression. He can’t fit into the school system very well, and doesn’t have a community or any friends. His mom tries to help him with grades, but it only serves to make him believe her love is highly conditional. His grades improve, but his depression is deep.
Someone finds out his mom is an abortion clinic nurse and tells him about all the horrors of abortion. They spare him no anger or accusation. Again, his depression grows stronger.
Finally he finds out that in order for his mom to counsel women to get an abortion she tells them that she wishes she had had the resources to get an abortion when she wasn’t ready. (Horrifically, such things have been said.)
So he kills himself. 😥 See why these are so depressing?
He would probably leave a note explaining to his mom why he killed himself, and also explaining to her the horrors of abortion that have been told him.
She quits her job and becomes a pro-life activist in honor of her son. Through that, she meets a church and finds a real community for the first time in her life. And this is so sad, because her son never lived to find a community, nor acceptance in Christ.

Anyway, what are your thoughts on that story? The thing might be mushy and depressing, but with good research and a lot of work, it can reveal a lot of the problems in Mexico and in abortion that aren’t common knowledge.

 

So what I want to know is

  1. Which story would you most likely read and refer?
  2. And what ideas do you have for that story?

 

Thank you SO much! If I don’t get help for one of these I might go insane!

~Ellie

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Long for Home, Critique Wanted

This blog was originally made to get feedback from people who took time out of their life to read it. So….do I still have any of those readers? Hmm, good question.

I am getting close to self publishing a short story through Createspace.com. I’m getting closer every day, and I can feel it in my bones. It’s almost ready….almost.

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A brief synopsis is on the back of the book cover. The first draft (a lot of editing has been done) was my original profession and explanation of my faith, written right after I was saved in 2010. Right now I am looking for people to review the book and tell me what fine-tuning is left to be done. The story is about 16,000 words long.

If anyone is interested, let me know in the comments and I can send you an email.

 

Thanks!
Ellie

Read My Story!!!!

I must apologize for not blogging. I am very busy, believe me!

My brother is engaged! He is planning on getting married October 13th, 2013.

Thus, I am busy!

Second, I go to Wisconsin tomorrow! I am terribly excited and I will try to take all the pictures I can! It’s the awesomest place I’ve ever been! We are still trying to get packed, get food ready for the 10-11 hour drive, and pack the van.

Thus, I am busy!

But I haven’t completely forgotten my blogger friends. I do have pictures I have drawn, but the picture I am working on I cannot show you. Not yet! 😉 Instead, I have something for y’all to read. I found and read over one of my old drafts, from June 2013, Camp Nanowrimo. I think it is my favorite draft that I have. I made a cover for it awhile ago….

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To be sure, I have plans to change some things in it, but I want to let y’all read it and critique it. Please be ruthless with the story, and please be kind to me!

If a doc. doesn’t work for you somehow, let me know and I’ll try to email it to you, but it will be after I return from Wisconsin.

NOTE: If an italicized sentence or portion is not expressly a thought of a character, then it is subject to removal and is italicized just for me. I’ve also written notes for myself, just ignore them, if you want.

1 The introduction to the family of Adofo, and how misfortune befell them in the cozy town where they lived and what became of their misfortune.
2 Leaving the town and journeying on
3 Dividing 
4 The fates and fortunes of Hanson and Westby
5 The fates and fortunes of Mireille and Hurlee
6 The Placing of Hanson and Westby
7 Living in the place
8 What became of Westby’s place
9 What became of Hanson’s place
10 Hanson’s captivity 
11 Westby slipping
12 The Capture of Mireille
13 Westby’s search

Part Two

14 Hanson’s escape
15 Hurlee slipping
16 Mireille and Westby’s Captivity
17 As a Captive
18 Captive and more
19 Breaking point
20 Rescue
21 No Rescue
22 Preparing for Change
23 Escape
24 Betrayal
25 Westby’s rescue
26 The end
for those who wondered

Enjoy!

Chill Peeps!

Electric Bubbles

Beginning Writer and some team work

First, by way of introduction….

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This is Jimmy!!!!

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Alright, so now that you know Jimmy, I can tell you he’s a new writer! He is writing me a lovely story about a “dee” (bee). Today he was super excited to do it–give me a story to edit and revise for him.

He is smart you know! Today he told us, “Lighting bugs must eat the sun.” When I told him it was too cute he said, “I mean, they sit out in the sun so they can glow at night. That’s like their food.” That’s why he should be a writer. I told him so and that is where this started, but obviously he’s had this idea of the bee in his head for quite awhile, since he learned about them in school.

So here’s his story.

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Translation: “Once there was a bee, but he didn’t have wings or a pattern. He was a little worm shape. One day he woke up. He was shaped like a bee, but he did not have a pattern like a bee, so he ate furious but they….”(I’ve only received one page. He’s still working on the second.
After he proudly gave me his work–I revised it. Here’s the second draft:
“Once upon a time there was a bee, well, he was not really a bee, not to himself. To himself he saw only a little worm shape, and honestly, he really was just a little worm. No wings, no stripes.
He waited quite awhile, depressed because he never thought he would be a bee. Not now, not ever. But the day came when he found that his head was shaped very finely, and his body as well. But he was not a bee, and he knew it, because he had no stripes, no pattern.
He went on with his life, admiring his head and eyes, but not doing much else–except eat honey of course; the real bees above poured it down on his head constantly….”
Watch out Washington! Look out Times Square! Here we come to rock the nation!
Happy Writing!
Electric Bubbles

Camp NaNoWriMo, July 2013

Another Camp NaNoWriMo in July! ^o^

This July I am not going for 50,000, not 80,000, but 100,004 words! *faints* I’m not asking you to do that though. Because you can change your word-count to whatever suits your month, even 10,000 words count.

For some people who follow my blog, you’re used to skipping any post with a mention of “NaNoWriMo” “novels” or “insane”, but take another look and and give it a second thought. This is for normal and notnormal alike. ^_^ Even if you’ve never liked writing before, you can always try.

For other people, maybe you skip every post but the ones that mention “NaNoWriMo”, and in that case, gear up for another month of noveling!

For visitors who don’t yet know what Camp NaNoWriMo is, I’m only too happy to explain.

National Novel Writing Month (NaNoWriMo for short) is an exciting challenge to write 50,000 words in the month of November. Camp NaNoWriMo is the same challenge, but adapted to fit the Summer months. In July, you can change your wordgoal, choose cabin mates to be partnered with, but basically do the same thing–have fun writing!

This month, honestly, I’m not going to try to get something wonderful this month. In fact, not even something I would dare to show people, I did that last month. This month, *sigh* I’m just writing for the fun of writing. I’m not planning, not paying attention to the plot, I’m just not. That may disappoint some people, but it’s just been too long since I wrote that kind of story. (November 2011 to be exact.)

Tell me what you are doing! Do you know yet? If not–IT STARTS IN THIRTEEN DAYS!

Good luck, peeps! ^o^

Electric Bubbles

7DayStory

 

Hey Peeps,

I miss NaNoWriMo too much, and on a whim I signed up for the 7DayStory challenge. http://7daystory.com/
If I had been thinking, I would have waited to get a writing buddy to go along with me, but I wasn’t thinking, I was just missing NaNoWriMo.
So! This is the belated, “Join me!” note.
Check out http://7daystory.com/ and sign up!
Yours Truly
Electric Bubbles

Camp NaNoWriMo, A Grand Finish

Whoop! I finished yesterday with 81,153 words! I finished my wordgoal right as I finished drinking a large cup of strong iced coffee. I generally try to keep still right after I drink coffee, but I couldn’t yesterday. I went nuts. I was talking and shaking and typing and laughing so fast I could barely understand what I wanted to say. After that, I crashed, and was blissfully tired the rest of the evening. It truly was an epic experience. Perhaps the most epic experience of NaNoWriMo, just because I fought so hard to get 80,000 and 10,000 in the last two days when I should have been writing 5,332 in the last two days. And I cheered on friends to the finish, rejoicing with everyone until I was in a state of literal frenzy.

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Today–I printed out my whole novel, if you can call it a novel. I finished my original climax so I just carried on the story until I had all my words. It still has no finish. But I printed it all out and held it with my own hands.

 

nanowrimo novelI was very happy to hold it, and for future NaNoWriMo’s, I won’t be able to do any differently.

I thought about shredding my novel and sleeping on it, Chris Baty’s way to celebrate, but if I did, I might burst into tears and not sleep for days.

I finally named it too, though the name will most likely change sometime.

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Also, I am trying to lengthen the story and turn it into three separate stories, so I need more than one title.

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Not only was it terribly exciting to hold my novel and see a whole month’s work, it is enjoyable to read through and write notes on. I’ve already been going through with a favorite pen and writing my opinions of each scene. I’m not discouraged yet! (Though I’m sure it will come. Always does, peeps, just be ready for it.)

Endless thanks to all my writing buddies who kept me going, inspired me, and fought countless wordwars. Without those wordwars there’s no way I could have made it.

So now with another rough draft under my belt, and perhaps my favorite yet–

Chair for now!

me

P.S. I was going to shower before I took these pictures, but that did not seem to me to be in the NaNoWriMo spirit. Don’t worry, I wore deodorant. 😛