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Can You See Me? 35k story

coverI wrote two shorter stories in November last year for NaNoWriMo, because this first one only got me 35,000 words or so.

I finally decided to let my blog readers critique it.

Now understand–this is very rough, there are removed/not inserted scenes, and they are all scattered. The climax scenes were very unprofessionally put together, the chapters stop part way, I think,  but I still want to hear your criticisms.

Pg 4 Pg 1 Pg 2 Pg 3

Thanks!

Electric Bubbles

 

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3 thoughts on “Can You See Me? 35k story

  1. Okay, so I know that your book was posted months ago, but I just found and finished reading “Can you see me?” Let me just say- WOW. I am severely impressed, it was incredible!

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